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The Circus

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Dymos Pune

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Dora Terra-Mangle was a lion tamer in Leeds from 1947 until May 15th, 1960. That was the day of the catastrophe when Dora, at home in her family caravan near the big top, dropped her thick green eyeliner and then a mirror, which broke with intent.

The circus’s first show of the afternoon ended when Leonard, the largest lion, bit Dora’s head off. Startled, it plopped and rolled towards the audience. Leonard got to Dora’s wet liver before being shot by someone he couldn’t see. He hadn’t bargained on fatal reprisal and disapproved.

He had hoped to meet a scarlet tiger. He’d seen a big white Bengali in Berlin in the cold winter and he’d heard of others with black stripes, like a zebra.

He’d never fancied a life of failed glory on the African plains, of deep stalking grass and twitching gazelle and the nonchalant dispatch of unsuitable cubs.

Soon he’d be in a handsome tobacco and leather home, a stuffed, stitched and roaring trophy on his hind legs, or a head on a wall with a proud surround:

Ernest, Southern Rhodesia, 1960

It was left to Romele Ward, the large clown, and the ventriloquist Dymos Puné, a frequent liar, to tell the small and quiet audience that Dora’s decapitation was not part of the act. A lonely young woman stood and shouted, Oh Yes It Is.

Romele would later say to his friends that Dora was unwise to put her head in Leonard’s mouth when Leonard had told her the previous day to fuck off forever or he’d bite her head off.

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Colleen · ago
Great story!
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thank you, Colleen. I'm flattered that you like it.
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Elvis · ago
Nice one Dymos, nice one son, nice one Dymos, let's 'ave another one.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Well as I can't put up another one on here, you'll have to go to my website. At least two of those are better than the one I entered for this competition, which I slightly regret. The first one is clearly a work of genius whereas this one is a nice bit of fun.
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Aamer Raza · ago
Excellent - onwards and upwards.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Why thankee.
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Henrietta Hardy · ago
Fingers crossed!
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Dymos Pune · ago
Why thankee. Long shot but still worth hoping.
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Ophelia · ago
Good luck!
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thank you. Not much chance, looking at the votes but nice to be there.
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ljk · ago
Congratulations cuz! You deserve to win xx
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thank you! Although I there's little chance of that. x Too much emphasis on social media reach.
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David Caney · ago
Brilliant. Such talent, such word craft and humour that brought tears to my eyes as I watched Tintin rolling about on the floor as I read him your tale of woe.
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Dymos Pune · ago
you charmer you. Thank you,
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Puquita · ago
I just voted you good luck
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Mike Jackson · ago
That was fun! Thank you.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Mike. Hope all well with you. x
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Dymos Pune · ago
Worth a vote?
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Elizabeth · ago
Such an amazing story! You have talent! Here’s a link to my story https://short-edition.com/en/story/1-min/the-life-of-a-balloon-2
Feel free to check it out! I’ll definitely leave a vote!

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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks Elizabeth, although I notice your determination to say the same to virtually every submission in expectation of reciprocity. Still, with respect to yours, not bad. I'm not sure of your age but you do show real promise. In the meantime you I think it
Would help to make the allegory a bit more subtle. I hope my small observation is useful

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Elizabeth · ago
Perhaps say the same to the man whose currently in first place. It’s a technique and it’s working. Though it is true that I meant it on the stories I comment on because I did not comment on every single story. Yes my words are repetitive but I do mean it
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Elizabeth · ago
And I just realized how rude that sounded I’m very sorry. You really are a good writer and I wish the best
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Dymos Pune · ago
And I'm sorry if I sounded rude too. I did notice the guy in first place is doing the same but I don't think for a minute that Short Edition won't notice and not look too kindly on it - especially as he's had way more votes than he has reads. And thanks for the kind words.
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Elizabeth · ago
Thank you for the advice! I’ll obviously continue to comment nice words but I’ll only leave my link if I feel like I have similar writing taste as the author
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Tim · ago
So sorry if late. Hurry up and write another one!
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Dymos Pune · ago
In fact, I think I entered the wrong one.
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Dymos Pune · ago
No it's fine. The vote has registered, which is why I'm puzzled. As for others, I have a few but only allowed to enter one here. If you want to see more have a look at james-stories.com And thanks again.
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Tim · ago
Original and authentic. Still thinking about it 2 hours later! A fun read.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Tim. Glad you liked it. And thanks for the vote, though I'm a bit puzzled because I thought voting was over. Not complaining though.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Roger. Glad you enjoyed it. And especially that you found it funny.
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Roger · ago
Very funny Dymos you get my vote and thanks for your kind comments about DdlM
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Vicky · ago
Well done!
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Dymos Pune · ago
Lovely! Thanks, Vicky.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Vicky. Worthy of a vote?
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Vicky · ago
Yes 😊
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Dymos Pune · ago
May be a bit late too worry about that, Gita. Age shuffles on and all that.
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GITA · ago
Dymos you left a message on my comment page asking whether you should sulk. Sulking has its drawbacks, namely, unsightly wrinkles between the eyes. Therefore, I do not recommend it.
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Dymos Pune · ago
May be a bit late too worry about that, Gita. Age shuffles on and all that.
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GITA · ago
my favorite sentence is "He’d never fancied a life of failed glory on the African plains, of deep stalking grass and twitching gazelle and the nonchalant dispatch of unsuitable cubs." Nice bit of flash, this.
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Dymos Pune · ago
My favourite bit of yours is probably the very beginning. The introdution immediately sets the tone and space for the story, and is kept up throughout by the sparse description reflecting breadth and emptiness of landscape. I hope I'm not talking bollocks.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Reciprocal votes? ;)
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Gita. Oddly, I was thinking of missing that bit out as slightly interfering with the flow from the mild disappointment of not seeing a scarlet tiger to the humiliation of a false future in death (hence him then being called Ernest). Glad I kept it.
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jacksprat · ago
great yarn
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Jack. I'm glad you like it. Worthy of a vote?
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afran · ago
Enjoyed!
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Afran. glad you enjoyed it.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Ophelia. Glad you like it. Worthy of a vote? ;)
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Ophelia · ago
Wicked and smart storytelling in under a minute!😉
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Ophelia. Glad you like it. Worthy of a vote? ;)
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Dymos Pune · ago
Great. Thanks!
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Sarah Ahluwalia · ago
Hope to see more stories....maybe with a closer African content? No more head biting please 😉
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Alba. The stor's meant to be vaguely comic but there you go.
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Jem Bailey · ago
You are a dark horse. Or maybe a horse of a different colour. Not sure, but the analogy is going to be equine.
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Alba Warn · ago
A slightly disturbing story from a great story teller
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mcb · ago
Excellent story! Packs a lot into 1 minute.
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thanks, Kiki
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Paola Colombo · ago
Poor Dora...
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kiki · ago
fun and intriguing on later reflection
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Dymos Pune · ago
Thank you, Keith. I'll read The Awakening shortly...
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Keith Simmonds · ago
Thrilling and gruesome! My votes ! Here’s an invitation
to read and support “The Awakening” which is also in the
Button Fiction competition! Thanks in advance!
https://short-edition.com/en/story/3-min/the-awakening-1

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