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The Life Of A Balloon

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Elizabeth

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I am a balloon. I am born without anything inside-Ideas, opinions, choice. As years progress I am inflated with more. I soar the more I am filled with knowledge. Eventually I am off the ground. I am floating through the air. Sometimes I can get deflated by the hardships put on me. But those hardships can always be repaired with a little duct tape and persistence. As I grow older, the less I need a person below me to carry my string. Eventually I am launched into the world all alone. I float higher and higher meeting all different types of birds along the way. Some are kind and help launch me further into the sky. Some try and peck at me so I deflate again. Sometimes I give in and let them peck me. Those times teach me not to let silly birds rule me. As I am older I see another balloon in the sky. The wind pushes me toward this new balloon as trying to tell me what love is. I connect with this new balloon and we continue our journey together. Time flies and I am filled with my new partners own knowledge and love. We spot two smaller balloons in the distance playing in the clouds and having fun. The wind pushes them toward us and us four are connected. I spend my time trying to inflate the little balloons with my own knowledge of the world. I teach them to be creative and stand for themselves. I watch them deflate sometimes, but they always are reinflated with love and hard work. The little balloons float higher and higher , until eventually they don’t need my partner and I to fill them anymore. The two of us watch them float up above us, into a big blue sky. Suddenly, I come apron a great white abyss. I am floating farther away from my partner. I can sense his panic when they do not see me next them. The white sky is very bright, but looks peaceful. I let myself float up a little bit more. I have reached my point as balloon. I saw nearly all the sky, met nearly all the birds, and I am happy. Pop!

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Thara · ago
I like your story "The Life Of A Balloon"...
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Peter Silletti · ago
Very proud of you Liz...never stop writing!
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Keith Simmonds · ago
Here I am again to renew my appreciation for your text, Elizabeth! Good luck!
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Kathy · ago
I love your story.. Gammie is hoping you win..❤️
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Mary Gahagan · ago
Excellent. I love the analogy!
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Marie-Louise Mills · ago
I enjoyed your story! Good Luck! After the final selection and when you have a chance to relax read my story, The Feel of An Olive Pit.
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SallyE · ago
What a lovely story. Thank you, Elizabeth.
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carys · ago
I LOVE YOU CHERYL
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Poetrylover6996 · ago
🗿🗿🗿🗿
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Poetrylover6996 · ago
😎😎🗿🗿
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Sienna Soghomonian · ago
this has a lot of meaningful words that gently compliment the purpose.🥳🥳❤️
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Lil Divorce Settlement · ago
In the words of Benjamin Franklin


"Twas lit fam"

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jack · ago
John Cofran; So much said in so few words. We loved it. Nana Bev and John
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Michelle Laroche Johnson · ago
Excellent Elizabeth!!
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TrySimple · ago
Excellent read
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Nah · ago
good job liz
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Kerry Morin · ago
My favorite story ever!
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Debbie · ago
I enjoy your very creative writing. Hope to see more of it!
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Mary Morin · ago
Love this
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Dan Morin · ago
Great story, hope everyone sees it and the meaning as I do
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Rebecca Gwyn · ago
I love your story, too. 3 votes. Good luck!
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GITA · ago
Don't worry about punctuation mistakes. I think the story will be judged on its merits. I like that you sustained the metaphor from start to end. You get my vote. I hope you will take a moment to read mine, too. https://short-edition.com/en/story/1-min/the-curve.

Gita

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GITA · ago
I would appreciate any comment you leave at the end of my story.
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MusicalFanGirl116 · ago
Luv ur story this is what life is and I like the metaphor
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Cat Russell · ago
Love this idea, and especially "hardships can always be repaired with a little duct tape and persistence." :)
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Elizabeth · ago
Thank you so much! Would you like to leave a vote? No pressure! Up to you!
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Tillie · ago
Great job it really paints a clear picture in my mind
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Elizabeth · ago
Thanks! Would you like to leave a vote? No pressure only if you want!
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arianna · ago
love this! 💕
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Roger · ago
I enjoyed the metaphor, Elizabeth and thanks for voting for my story
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Tony Martello · ago
Refreshing story, Elizabeth! Thank you for reading mine as well. I am glad you enjoyed it :)
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Keith Simmonds · ago
My appreciation for this original and captivating short story, Elizabeth !
I invite you to come and read "The Awakening" !

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Elizabeth · ago
Thank you! I read it it is amazing
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Anita · ago
Beautiful essay!
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Barbara Gillespie · ago
Very nice Elizabeth I loved your story!
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TSG · ago
Wonderful. I like the unpolished style, feels like a new writer with ideas coming forth too fast for her to get bogged down in the details. Many famous writers have foregone punctuation altogether or adopted a stream of consciousness style. There's many ways to tell a story.
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Elizabeth · ago
Thank you! The punctuation mistakes weren’t a choice I am just quite bad at grammar haha
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Tom · ago
Excellent work!
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Omar Bou · ago
absolutely fantastic.
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Paul · ago
Very nice!
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Cool Aunt · ago
Awesome!
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Amanda · ago
Great 👍
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TrySimple · ago
Great read!
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Megan · ago
Love it!
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PKW · ago
Love you Elizabeth
Papa

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rtaylor · ago
This reminds me of Pixar short films, great work!
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Debbie Green · ago
That is a beautiful story. Well done!
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Yes Liz · ago
Go lizzz
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Not-Only But-Also Riley · ago
I'm a sucker for stories told from the point of view of inanimate objects, which is why I thought I might give this a go. I really dig it, and especially like the way you've paralleled the existence of this balloon with the experience of human life. Some of this comparison (personally I like the use of the birds the best) is really excellent. That said, I do feel like some parts of this parallel are slightly over-explained (I often do this while writing too, but it makes for a more engaging story if you leave some room for interpretation), but that is more about my personal preference as a reader than it is anything wrong with your writing. Overall, the message about how we spend our lives and being content with how we've spent our lives when time is up is very pleasing. Great work!
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Elizabeth · ago
Thanks for the advice!:)
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Debbie · ago
Very creative!
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Kathy · ago
This story took my breath away. I love it!!
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Nah · ago
Yasss queen
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Dan Morin · ago
Wow, great story
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